Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the influence of media on people especially kids and adolescents. Some people may hold the view that watching movies is one of the most entertaining things to do; However, others believe that its is a waste of time and it has cons way more than pros.
In my opinion, movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
First, media content is full of violence which have huge impact on kids. For example, when I was at the age of eight, I watched a movie with my family in the evening in which a man killed a lady while she was having her shower. I still remember that scene and I couldn't sleep for days after I watched that movie. Also, I spent years scared to close the curtains in the bathroom, as I imagined that there might be someone hiding behind it. I know it was just a movie, but children have wide imagination and they get easily affected by what they see or hear. A friend my mine told me about her five year old boy; she was complaining that he is too violent and stubborn,and his friends don't like playing with him as he gets irritated quickly and may hit someone or call people with bad names. Later, she discovered that he was imitating a cruel cartoon character that he watched on a TV series. Unfortunately, parents don't have enough control or a too busy to filter what their kids watch.
Second, media have harmful effects on kids' brains. I guess we all agree that media kills creativity in kids. I have read a study, that was published in 2014,which compared students' grades in different schools and the results were surprising. It was found that the results seventy percent of the kids who spend a lot of time playing on iPad or watching television are much less than their colleagues whom parents made restrictions on media access. That makes sense as they have less time to study and their brains are really affected by what they watch. In my opinion, it is like they cause a kind of mental retardation to kids. That's why parents have to do more effort watching over their kids and finding alternatives to TV, cell phones and iPad such as: playing sports, reading books, painting, watching education programs and other activities that may help their children grow to have good minds and bodies. I would like to emphasize the importance that parents should be careful when choosing what to watch and how to spend their time, in order to be good role models for their kids.
To wrap it up, parents should bare in my mind the powerful effects movies have on their kids and do their best to protect them from such harm.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, while, for example, i guess, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53699788584 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36350209711 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53911205074 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.541246208 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.3 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.65 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183451419685 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644062416132 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11306704771 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179113675586 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175643031676 0.0645574589148 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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