Thanks to the progress of technology, movies, and TV play a profound role in human life. Nowadays, there is a television in every home, which people allocate their time to. As far as I am concerned, TV and films influence youngsters inappropriately in many aspects. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, watching television grabs children’s time, which means it is wasting time for them. Childhood is a most precious time to learn anything because the brain is fresh and more active to be thought. Thus, there are many fields that young people can allocate their time to learn such as sport, history, and so on. On the other hand, movies can bias their mined and do not allow them to see the world from different vantage points. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was fifteen, I spent most of my time in front of a television, although my mother complained that I have to do my assignment. As a result, since I wasted my time in this way, I did not dedicate my time to do my homework. After a while, I could not pass my exam and I failed. Had I not spend much more time in front of the TV, I could have learned my lessons better.
Secondly, movies and television cause youngsters not to have physical activities, which in turn inconveniently affect their health. When you are seen monitor, you are always sedentary, and your muscles are inactive. Undoubtedly, having not physical activities can bring about many diseases such as heart attack and obesity. For instance, as I mentioned in the previous paragraph, when I was young because I spent most of my time seating on a sofa in front of the TV, my weight became more and more. Therefore, it gives rise to obesity for me and brings many difficulties. If I had had physical activities, I would not have had these problems.
In conclusion, I believe that the negative influences of TV are more than positive effects on young people. This is because it causes children to don’t spend their time learning new thing that is necessary for them, and seating in front of the TV and not having physical activities brig about unhealthy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...front of the TV and not having physical activities brig about unhealthy life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62371134021 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69730501653 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512886597938 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8460820338 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4285714286 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4761904762 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158450232869 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493000487432 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520929327086 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100082914331 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305303543624 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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