There are numerous aspects that governments deal with to improve social quality in communities. Social health is one of the prominent issues, which influences people in societies. In my opinion, officials ought to allocate more budget to support sports than arts. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, physical activities improve spirit among the crowd, which bring about more productivity in society. Numerous researches have shown that activities such as running and exercising help the brain secretes chemical proteins causing happiness in people. These chemical materials in the brain are closely related to the sense of happiness in life. People who feel happy in their life, consequently try to do their work better and more efficiently. As a result, societies benefit from more productivity of happy residents. For instance, five years ago when I was at university, I had a problem finishing my paper, for I could not focus on the subject. My professor suggested me going to the gym and exercising every day after my classes. After a while, that exercise gave rise to improving my spirit and helped me focus on my paper. Not only that, I built a fit body. Had not I done those activities, I could not have finished my assignment.
Secondly, support of athletics by the government raises social health quality among residents, which causes many profits in societies. Undoubtedly, people who sport every day have a healthy body, which means they have long longevity. The healthier, the stronger the family can be. In this regard, the medical expense of the government could diminish because the people will be healthier. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, I was studying hard at my college in other to be an important person in my society. I thought being professional would be enough to have a beneficial life. I was wrong because I did not pay attention to my body and physical health that plays a prominent role in everybody’s life. After a while, I was dealing with many diseases caused by obesity. I could not pass my exams, but also I spent my saving to cure my disease. If I had had exercise, I would have been happier.
In conclusion, I believe that government has to invest in athletics properly rather than in support arts. This is because physical activities raise productivity and efficiency in the society, and gives rise to improving social health quality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94724220624 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79595533778 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537170263789 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1245027391 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.4074074074 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4444444444 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.62962962963 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0976838522145 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296677397241 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500506272574 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814214740996 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378322691056 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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