Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history entertainment media plays an important role in all civilized societies. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration in order to examine its constructive and destructive facets of this matter. Some people may hold the view that movies and television programs have a positive impact of young people behaviors. In the meantime; some others may take an opposite view point and believe that this kind of media has a negative effect on young people. From my vantage point, I believe that the former viewpoint generally carries more weight. In what follows I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that television programs including movies, documentaries, and etc. are made to increase the knowledge and information of people especially young people. In fact, these programs usually are made in way to indirectly affect people behaviors and in some case correct their wrong social behaviors. A vivid example which can be given to shed light on the subject is social documentaries that is shown at night on television. In each episode, the program addresses improper behavior of young people in a variety of situations such as in college, in sports complex, or even in the parks. At the end of the program, a social analyzer discuss the episode in detail. Consequently, young people nurture indirectly by watching that program.
In approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. Media is an assistive and beneficial tool for parents who wants to nurture their young children. Actually, young children are resistive to parental control and advices due to their specific age ranges. In this period, young children wants to show that they are mature and independent. So, they do not listen to their parents. Hence, movies and television can aid parents. For example, family members can ga¬¬ther to watch a TV show or a movie and augment their relationships. Consequently, they can interact to each other and find a mutual way of speaking. Eventually, young people will be more flexible toward their parent’s speech.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, there are by no means the only reasons available. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics reveals by a recent research conducted in our country showed that television and movies have a positive impact on young people. The research study has conducted between young people from the same age group in ten hundred colleges in the country. They select this broad area in order to diminish the effect of cultural differences. The results showed that the students who watch movies and televisions regularly are more aware of their behavior and try to assess themselves and behave properly.
In the final analysis, according to what was mentioned in the body paragraphs above, on cannot deny the fact that the aforementioned topic is a controversial matter of discussion which must be elaborately addressed in order to precisely examine. However, there is authentic evidence which can lead us to this conclusion that media such as television and movies can play a pivotal role in young people behaviors. It can shape their character mostly in positive way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ograms including movies, documentaries, and etc. are made to increase the knowledge and ...
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Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...y young people. In fact, these programs usually are made in way to indirectly affect people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, apart from, for example, in fact, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2816.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18600368324 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84479186272 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515653775322 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3558965139 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205402493718 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527743456077 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427824488526 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114604797528 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332944400679 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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