Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In my country, young people have better lives than their parents had when they were young.
Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having a good life means that one is satisfied with one's life. Numerous generations have passed since the advent of human civilization, and each generation had different lives. Some people argue that the current generation has a worse life than their parent’s generation. However, I personally agree with the statement aforementioned for two reasons: the advancement of technology and the proliferation of entertainment.
First and foremost, technology has been more advanced than ever before. To be specific, as people discovered and invented numerous useful tools, such as computers and smartphones, today‘s lives have become more convenient. For example, when my mom was a college student, the smartphone and internet weren't widespread yet. She had to spend a lot of time finding information for her assignments. On the contrary, there are various ways of gaining information, so I can swiftly finish my homework. As one can clearly see, the advancement of technology has contributed to a better life for the younger generation.
In addition, various cultural interactions within the current generation have also contributed to better lives for the young. In detail, new entertainments such as Netflix or Youtube provide young people with more leisure time as entertainment has a significant impact on the quality of one’s lives. An observational study held in 2018 at Seoul University had a survey where participants were asked of the most amusing activities in his/her life. The results showed that 74% of the respondents answered that they had their most amusing activities online. The researchers inferred this result was prevalent especially in the younger generation since many people are exposed to various forms of online entertainment nowadays. This undoubtedly proves that the increase of new cultural interactions from online entertainment has led the life of young people to be more enjoyable than their parents’ generation.
Admittedly, some could argue that the environment has been dramatically polluted for the last decade, and there are negative effects of new technology and entertainment to the current generation. However, due to the convenience of using new technologies and the amusement of various forms of entertainment, I strongly agree with the statement above that in my country, young people have better lives than their parents' young lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for example, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51771117166 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15951774777 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525885558583 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3384289764 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283540224715 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842370765328 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822498194757 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179782230397 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573123355863 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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