Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, parents serve as a major influence in their children's career development. The inevitable question which has always caused heated debate among parents is whether juvenile should take a part-time job besides their education or not. I firmly believe that working can help teenagers in quite a few aspect of life. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, a part time job could help teenagers to discover their innate talents and skills in early ages. A young person's first real step into adulthood is finding a desirable job. If parents encourage their offspring to try different jobs they interested in, they can choose their vocation easily in adulthood. In other word, taking job parallel to continuing education leads to abilities discovery in early ages. For example, when I was teenager, my father encouraged me to find a job during summer. I gathered as much information as possible on my career interest areas. Eventually, I decided to work in a civil company because I was captivated in civil engineering. At the end of summer, I conceive that, my desirable vocation is civil engineering. Therefore, I chose my major from early ages and continued my study in this field at ranked university. Now I am very satisfied with my decision and I think this major fits to me. Had I not taken a job in adolescence period, I would have not recognized my favorite job.
Second, parents should allow their children some in-dependencies that obtained with earning money on their own. By taking a part-time job children can save money and buy whatever they want without asking money from their parents. In addition, they learn how difficult to earn money, so they prepare themselves for future life when they have to manage a family without the presence of their family. This clearly demonstrates that taking a part-time job can be helpful for teenagers.
Therefore, parents should allow adolescents to discover who they are on their own. The best way for this goal is encouraging children finding a job from early ages because it can help them feels independence from their parents and discover their ability for using them in future life.
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Suggestion: few aspects
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9756097561 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73083609801 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560975609756 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5183978316 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4285714286 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314709408156 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909176610944 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800777071976 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214654963759 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496871890816 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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