Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, human beings have attempt to improve their life condition. Some people believe that because of the advance in technology and modernization contemporary people have more salubrious and convenient life than people in the past. Others, however, advocate the idea that people were happier and more satisfied with their lives in the past. I personally, concur with the latter. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
Nowadays, all member of the family have a hectic schedule. They work all the day and they do not have any time to have companionship with their friends or even their family. They are inclined to make the most of their times and work hard to achieve whatever they want. Therefore, contemporary people are insulated and sad people because they do not speak with each other about the events occurred during the day, laugh anymore, gather to have dinner with each other to name but a few. For example, my parent and me always get up early in the morning and come back home late. when we reach home, we can just eat dinner and there is any time to speak with each other about my daily occurrences.
Secondly, by advancing technology, individuals spend their leisure time on using smartphones, video games, computers to name but handful than speaking with each other. A study conducted by scholars in my country shows that there is a significantly high correlation between the amounts of time people use electronic devices and their depression. people who are addicted to the electronic devices are depressed and they are not satisfied with their life because they lose the best way of communication which is face-to-face one.
To sum up, I really believe that people not only are not happy these days, but also they have numerous emotional and physical problems on the ground that they do not have enough time to spend with their imitate friends and they rely too much on technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'attempted'.
Suggestion: attempted
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Suggestion: When
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Suggestion: People
...lectronic devices and their depression. people who are addicted to the electronic devi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92771084337 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60912231096 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3641867347 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.066666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1333333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243743444678 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884557677252 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717009453378 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164493465348 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619061245683 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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