Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Preparing children for their future life is one of the important tasks of parents. Since kids don't have plenty of information about the society, they consider their parents as a role model that can use their advices as means which lead children to have a prospers life. Some people believe that parents could help children to have better adult life by encourage them to have a part-time job, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, involving in temporary jobs could be beneficial for children's future for two remarkable reasons.

The main reason is that having part-time job in childhood increase kid's experience for future. When children spend a part of their time in work they could interact with more people having various prospective. Also, they deal with bunch of difficulties that should solve by themselves. All of these leads them to gain a valuable knowledge which can be used in future. For example, when I was kid, although my parent always supports me, they learn me how to stand on my own feet. So. I spent part of my daily life in my father's supermarket to gain my pocket-money. At first, it was really hard for me to be responsive for people in different personality and had argue with them some times. As time went, I could learn a lot from both my success and failure which provided me with enough experience in adulthood when I wanted to initiate my own business. As you can see, my preparation for future life results from my childhood work.

Second, children who have part-time job could be more successful in their future job. One pillar of success in one's job is to be responsible. As kids dealing with part-time jobs, they learn to be more commitment. Furthermore, by spending a part of time in temporary careers, kids could find their real interest for their ideal job and prepare themselves for future. For instance, statistics show that individuals, who had a part-time job in childhood, could make better decisions for their future job. Researchers investigation indicate that experiences diverse situation cause kids to select their interest among vast choice they have that decrease the rate of failure. If children know that something is really the thing they want, they spend more time and effort on it which leads to their success. Therefore, part-time job is undoubtedly beneficial for having better future.

In conclusion, encouraging children by parents to involve in part-time jobs could prepare them for future life. Not only it enhances their knowledge, but it also makes them prospers in their future career. I think every parent should lead their kids to have a part-time job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...people in different personality and had argue with them some times. As time went, I c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2208.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95067264574 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65372834438 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477578475336 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.249688696 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318947371695 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117633281868 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659159383608 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241038915513 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422954412248 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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