Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are the blessings in our life. Their love, sacrifice and caring is proportionate to our future growth. Their attitudes, decisions is a big factor for any growing children. The best way children can prepare their children for adulthood by promoting them to take part time job- some would agree with this idea, others would not. In my view, parents can help their children in the best way not to let them in order to earn rather giving them time for a healthy future. I think in that way for the following two important reason.
The main reason is that parents should give their children enough time for education. We know the proverb, 'education is the backbone of a nation' and the importance of education to build a discreet nation is undoubtable. But, on this precious time, throwing teenager for part time job is like to derail them from the path of success. For example, the successful tycoon in our society and great inventor were all educated and they reached their present situation not from their earlier life, I mean from childhood but after preparing themselves, they are now holding that place. If we talk about the tech giant Bill Gates- analyzing his earlier life we found he was attending the top tier school, college and university. Then, he established his tech company. As you can see that, earning is a good choice for anyone especially for solvency but, for greater and influential future those earnings are just futile.
Another reason is that childhood is the time for enjoyment, creating lots of good memories with families. We know, only memory is remains as they prompt us to carry our life in an organized way. The teenager who engaged himself in a part time work not have enough time for building these memories and often suffering depression. For instance, a great soul and jovial mind produced a greater good in our society. When, I was studying in university, I came to know a boy adjacent to our university. The boy parents are not interested to his enjoyment rather they were eager to use the wherewithal from that boy. Then, after many years, when the boy reached his adulthood, he was sad for his childhood memories. This experience taught me that, enjoyment is an integral part, devoid from this has long term consequences.
To wrap up, it is common to take side from the parents who support their children earn money from their boyhood but in long term thinking such position will not convincing to give credit. Giving time to children for education and enjoyment in their teenager time will not only make them a better and learned individual but also keep them mindfulness and good wellbeing. So, we should encourage our children for study and take them long trip to splash colors of their life canvases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...for adulthood by promoting them to take part time job- some would agree with this idea, o...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...is precious time, throwing teenager for part time job is like to derail them from the pat...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
.... The teenager who engaged himself in a part time work not have enough time for building ...
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Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...ntegral part, devoid from this has long term consequences. To wrap up, it is comm...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'convince'
Suggestion: convince
...ng term thinking such position will not convincing to give credit. Giving time to children...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'giving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: giving
...nking such position will not convincing to give credit. Giving time to children for edu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80631578947 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.507397587 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515789473684 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3925685689 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.125 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7916666667 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346783951779 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100444220512 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859167530646 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235043592465 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10471130598 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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