Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computer is an extraordinary invention of modern science. It has brought us many kinds of advantages. Playing game is important in order to enjoy the life in full throttle. Playing automated game is a kind of wasting time for children. I am pretty some would disagree with the given prompt. But, I support the claim because of the two important reason.
The main reason is that, playing computerized game make children lonely and isolated. The age of children is the most valuable time to pass its effectively such as gossiping with friends, learning morality from family members, relatives and also neighbors. If the children is not do that communication then he deprived himself from the society. Ultimately, he or she will become depressed and being isolated from the society. For example, I was born in a small village of Bangladesh. During our childhood time we had not access to computer. For this reason, we were spending our time with our friends, family and relatives. We have had enough time to pass in an effective way that ultimately shaped our future in better way. But, todays time, most of the children are not access to go outside to spend their time by doing fun and enjoy. As you can see, playing with computer todays children retard themselves from doing social activities that will endanger our future generation.
Another reason is that children are put themselves in risk by not doing playing outside. As children now are playing in computer games, they are not able to go outside for play. This will borrow many health risk. For instance, as I was raised my childhood in village. I have had enough priviege to play different game. Those game were the actual motivator for my good physical structure. Later in my life I became an athlete because of my childhood body. In our village we were used to play different games, such as running, swimming, jumping, cricket, football etc. Those types of games were ultimate elixir for us. In todays world, children often suffering many physical ailments, such as poor bone growth, stunt, muscle atrophy etc. These were easily avoidable by playing outdoor games. This experience taught me that, by playing only indoor games children are put their health in risk.
In sum, some would suggest children to play indoor computer games that will put their life in great risk. Not only, make them emotional trauma patient but also will build their body week that would make them vulnerable to fall in disease. So, we should teach our children go outside to play rather then staying in front of the automated monitor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ldren is the most valuable time to pass its effectively such as gossiping with frie...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... members, relatives and also neighbors. If the children is not do that communicati...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
... also neighbors. If the children is not do that communication then he deprived him...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...atives. We have had enough time to pass in an effective way that ultimately shaped our future in be...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun health seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much health', 'a good deal of health'.
Suggestion: much health; a good deal of health
...o go outside for play. This will borrow many health risk. For instance, as I was raised my ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to playing'.
Suggestion: used to playing
... childhood body. In our village we were used to play different games, such as running, swimm...
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Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
... our children go outside to play rather then staying in front of the automated monit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for example, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89726027397 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48238199029 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511415525114 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2943795175 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.1935483871 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1290322581 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1935483871 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319007957876 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828020479046 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684177085033 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199220411592 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293621693022 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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