Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
One of the most important of parental concerns is how to bring up their child to be a success person in his future life. Many people suggest each other allow children to have a job in order to become a responsible person in their future life. Definitely, some people if asked would agree with the statement that encouraging teenage children to take a part-time job would help them prepare for adult life while others have a negative attitude. As I am concerned, I completely agree with this idea. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments for supporting my views.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that taking a part-time job to assist them in practice to be financially independent of their parents. Teenagers have to know they could not always rely on their family for financial supporting and they should make money on their own self. Also, they have to learn planning for their income. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. I remember, when I was a student, my father asks me if I agree with having a part-time job while I was studying in high school. At first I wanted to refuse that idea because I thought working exhausted me for studying appropriately, but I preferred to experience new thing, furthermore, I had an income that was very useful for me as a student. by working I paid every month by my employer. I spent that money for educational expenses like buying a book, and course resources, and also for my leisure activity without asking my parent for money.
The second reason that deserves some words is that working helps the teenagers gain a wide perspective and insight about their future career. Because they have achieved some knowledge and skills that without any doubt would be advantageous for their future job and help them to choose their job base on familiarities with workplace condition and their abilities. For instance, one who works in a restaurant, over time he recognizes that had talent in cooking and he would like to be a chef in the future. While he is working there he gains information about people’s favorite foods and also a lot of information about managing the restaurant. These experiences help him to improve in his future work sooner than one who wants to begin this work newly.
By the way of conclusion, base to the arguments that explored above I am of the opinion that working part-time job by helping teenagers to become independent and have a broad perspective about their future career prepare them for adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 310, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to plan'.
Suggestion: to plan
...heir own self. Also, they have to learn planning for their income. To illustrate that id...
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Line 2, column 749, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...at was very useful for me as a student. by working I paid every month by my employ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e career prepare them for adult life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, for instance, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80778032037 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73490514101 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505720823799 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.265594945 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.578947368 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328036435256 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992908721323 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809320436309 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226370778346 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07637699251 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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