Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays the celebrities are ruling the world. Even though, many people argue that celebrities' word or their preaching is all fake and that doesn't apply to the real world where we stay. I agree that the famous artist's opinions always matter to at least a few people in changing their lives. Those points can be elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, the movie celebrities are highly influential candidates and in particular, their words are much influential to the younger people. Many young people assume their favorite celebrity as their role model and will follow their footsteps. On the other hand, some people react to the sayings of the most famous celebrities as their words are plagiarized and prepared well before. Additionally, in order to save their image they just say satisfactory theories to people. For instance, my friend is a huge fan of M. S Dhoni. he is an Indian cricketer. As he did some of the advertisements with a slogan saying that "save green save the environment", my friend created a group of people, so that they can plant trees and follow the footsteps of Dhoni. Moreover, later a day when I have seen the social media many people posted a story as planting trees and tagging Dhoni. By this, we can assume that the word's of celebrity people has a much higher influence on the mundane people's lives.
Furthermore, many people are making bio-pictures of a well-known celebrity in order to express the character of a celebrity and his harder times in the industry. In addition to that knowing about such inspiring people making the teens improve their quality of life and also to fight against their depression for smaller things. Though, many people think that the content of the biopics are not that reliable many people get inspired by watching those movies. This illustration is an example of my own personal experience. When I was in dental school, I got low grades and got depressed as I did not want to tell my parent's about my incapability. However, after watching the inspiring story of Deepika Padukone, the most famous actress of Bollywood about overcoming her depression, I believed that what I went through was nothing. As I'm still young, I can fight with anything in this world and that hope was because of the most overwhelming actress. This example clearly shows that famous celebrities can be helpful for younger people to teach various life lessons.
In conclusion, I vehemently assert that opinions of celebrities matter to young people. It is not only because of their influence on the teens but also their inspiring stories help them to build their harder times.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, at least, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93453724605 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73642985416 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512415349887 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.378199615 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0434782609 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2608695652 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08695652174 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195682200399 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572183533461 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483160863545 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117313689842 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476534087324 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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