Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

It's not uncommon that the standpoints of celebrities can be heard from various channels, due to their profound impact on our daily life. People are beginning to consider whether those opinions are more important to younger generation or older generation. Personally, I firmly insist that celebrities' opinions are of more importance to younger people rather than older people. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas by subsequent paragraphs.

Firstly, the younger incline to gain knowledge from outside world, and are willing to adopt new views and ideas. Eager and curious, younger people have a passion for accumulating experience through paying attention to celebrities' sayings in order to facilitate their own success. If you take a glimpse at celebrities' social medias, it's not surprising that most of their followers are young generation. Celebrities, as the top elites of the world, with no doubt have specific reasons to success, such as diligent, resilience or vision, which can set good example for young people. Hence, the young dedicate a colossal amount of time and money to celebrities’ speeches, sports or interviews. Contrary to young generation who put their enthusiasm on celebrities' opinions, elderly people place more emphasis on personal heath than on other activities.

Secondly, younger generation are in the stage of laying solid foundation for their future careers, demanding to adopt appropriate opinions. While older people would have coped with some hardships and setbacks, younger people probably have no idea of what will happen in their future. Therefore, the opinions from extremely successful people are considerably valuable for the young generation who desire success but lack guidance. As for older generation, they in some sense have developed their own systems of judgement and values, which are barely changed effortless. They watch celebrities' speeches, different from younger people, generally only for the sake of entertainment. It's the younger people who hold a dominant position as celebrities' audiences.

Thirdly, older people are those who grew up from younger ones. At their young ages, they must be as the same enthusiastic as nowadays younger generation who eager to learn something useful from celebrities. Those valuable opinions learnt from young time shaped their current mind. Adding more simulations from celebrities discounts its effects, which by contrast would generate more amazing results on younger generation. Thus, it's more important for younger people to listen to opinions from celebrities.

In sum, younger people are more likely to accept the opinions of celebrities, and conversely those opinions are more important to young people.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It's; It is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, as for, i feel, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52731591449 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82638974023 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524940617577 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9391945767 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.772727273 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294852519928 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103424777052 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774888768444 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197660148373 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233144525475 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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