The impact of famous people's notion on different members of communities has always been one of the most interesting arguments among people. When it comes to this issue, some people believe that celebrities draw more attention from the youngsters while some others disagree and claim that celebrities' fan are included older people as much as younger one. Although it seems plausible at first glimpse that the second idea carries more weight because both of these generations are members of societies, I would counter this point of view due to some reasons. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, famous people can affect young members more than the older one since they are more sensitive or emotional. To be more exact, as youngsters are in a specific stage of their lives which makes them more sensitive than the older one, so celebrities’ thoughts are more significant for them. Take my cousin, for illustration. He is a teenager who makes a role model of some famous singer because he is so emotional and does not live in the real world. However, those singers have totally distinctive conditions with him, he tries really hard to follow in their food steps and does all things as well as they do. While, it is not important for the older member of society, how celebrities live since their emotions are often under their control. Consequently, famous people's opinions have more effect on youngster than they have on older people.
The other reason which deserves some words here lies in the fact that the youngsters want to find their way of life that is why celebrities’ notions are more noteworthy for young members of communities. Whereas old people figured out it and have built their lives. To clarify this point, young people do not have enough experience to progress their lives and they desperately want to understand which the best way of life is. Therefore, they have to learn it from others and one noticeable and lure way is how the celebrities live. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. When I was a teenager, I followed lots of famous athletes such Maradona. It had always been my dream to play soccer as well as him. But, my father has been a realistic person, so he always reminded me that my lessons were more essential than playing soccer since I was not so talented in that field.
To sum up, given the facts that young members of societies are more sensitive and they badly seek for the best way of life. I vehemently believe that they are more susceptible to celebrities’ notions than older people are.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, i mean, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77850877193 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60645813312 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508771929825 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8214606409 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.761904762 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283253065471 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886591210343 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749255319019 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182662419288 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371999620065 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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