Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It rarely surprises us anymore that celebrities’ opinions have strong effect to today’s people in the society. However, more often than not, hordes of people are likely to go to extremes to hold that older people concerns more on the opinions of celerities for elders believe popularity. Perhaps there is an element of truth in their argument, but I, without hesitation, advocate that opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
First and foremost, what never ceases to enthrall me is the fact that younger poeple are easily influenced by their personal emotions. To begin with, youngers are more pulsible in admiring celerities. For example, when some youngers saw an athlete achieve a great success in his area, they will admire him very much. In this way, if the celebrity express his preference to a certain sport brand, the youngers will remove their admiration to that person to the products of that brand and want to buy the products. Besides, yongers who are lacking of ability of critical thinking are likely to follow the opinion of someone who is famous. For instance, when a famous entertainer expresses her idea about an event, her fans will always agree with her without judging the event based on their own thinking, and some more youngers will follow the opinion when they see so many people agree with it. Therefore, there is no denying that opinions of celebrities are important to youngers for they are more willing to admire and believe their idols or famous poeple.
Morever, youngers concerns about information in areas such as amuzement and sports exerts a considerable fansination on me. If people want to fit in better with the group or find common topics, trying to understand more infomation about celebrities would be a fantastic choice. A recent case concerns my cousin Melody, who achieved a real sense of happiness after gaining many good friends by talking to her classmates about celebrity topics. Melody, initially unawared about any celebrities which her classmates are familiar with and always talked about, so found it difficult to integrate into the class, making her depressed and down all the time. Later on, however, with her sister’s encouragement, she tried to search the story or works of some famous celebrities and exchanged the idea with her classmates, an event radically changed her life. At last, she really enjoyed the happiness of having topics to talk with her classmates and became more open, thereby achiveing a positive attitude towards her school life. Accordingly, it is appearant that young people like to concern about celebrities and talked about them, which means celebrities play an important role in youngers’ lives.
In conclusion, it is true that older people are easier to be persuaded by popularity of the celebrities, but considering the involvement of celebrities in the lives of young people, we can not deny that celebroties’ opinion are important to yongers than olders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12195121951 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7197400466 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530487804878 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.4765757357 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310235266957 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106892933208 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700700633628 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205543660352 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717597611917 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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