TPO32 Integrate writing

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TPO32 Integrate writing

The lecture is mainly contradicting the possible sources of the odd sounds detected by Russian submarines in 1980 mentioned in the reading passage by providing three reasons.

Firstly, in the reading passage, it is said that strange noises could be the calls of male orca whales because the strange noises are similar to those whales' sounds. In contrast, the professor thinks that the strange sounds could not source from whales because they were far away from Russian submarines. The professor indicates that orca whale activated near the ocean surface while Russian submarines dived deep in the ocean. Thus, their sounds could not be heard by sailors. Moreover, even if orca whale was near the submarines, the sonar could have detected this solid object. But it did not.

Secondly, the reading passage claims that strange noises could source from giant squids which could not be detected by sonar. However, the professor holds an opposite opinion that it is impossible because giant squids should not disappear suddenly. Actually, the sounds from squids had been reported by Russian from 1960 to 1980. As submarines are continually patrolling, the sounds from squids should have been detected even in today. But the report of sound stopped abruptly in 1980, suggesting it may not belong to squids.

Finally, the reading passage believes that strange noises could be another country's submarines which were designed to make them undetectable by sonar. But the professor disagrees with such idea by pointing out that the direction of the strange sounds was not corresponding to submarines. In specific, the direction of the strange sounds changed quickly while submarines could not. Furthermore, since submarines also emitted engine noise, such noise should have been heard. But no such reports.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 286.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30769230769 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50998300206 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496503496503 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 443.7 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1415621456 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2941176471 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42571398737 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134272945058 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683502101188 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25739440039 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547768466213 0.0443174109184 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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