Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
The way we teach children and shape their personality is one of the most important things all parents should pay attention to it and as we live in a world full of financial problems, we should teach children a good knowledge of financial management. Some people believe we have to teach children how to be responsible financially when they are at the young age while others disagree. I agree with the first point of view and would like to elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, children's personality shapes at the young age. There is a well-known said which says "Everything we learn at the young age is like a permanent cave on a stone", and it can be the same about all financial responsibility we teach our children at the young age. If we teach them how to manage their pocket money, and tell them if they do not manage their money in the best way may face to some financial consequences in the future, they will learn to be responsible for all other things, and that is because they learn how different topics are connected to each other. My own experience is a compelling example of it. When I was seven years old, my father told me I should learn how to manage my money and however I faced some problems for a couple of times, but I finally learned to manage and save money for rainy days, and because of that I could buy my first car when I was just twenty years old. In my view, all financial lessons I tough at the young age really helped to decide which costs are essential and which are not, and by making decisions about financial issues I could learn about other topics as well.
Second, being responsible is the most important thing we all have to learn, and the young age is the best period of life to learn it. The importance of being responsible is plain as day, and as all children mimic all behavior of their parents, if we be responsible, our children will learn responsibility practically, and that is why we should teach them at the young age when they are ready to learn easily. To bring an example I can mention to my brother. When she was ten years old, he used to mimic all things my water used to do and because my father was really paying attention to financial issues and had a responsible personality type my brother learned how to be like my father, and now he is just like him and know how to make the best financial decisions.
To sum up, responsibility is one of the most characteristics of each person, and we can realize its importance by paying attention to this point that one of the most important requirements of all high-level jobs is the level of responsibility a person can have. Based on this point and two other presented justifications, my conviction is we should teach children to become responsible financially at the young age because as the result of that they will be responsible for all other aspects of their life too.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52075471698 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73223183124 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394339622642 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.4771131061 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.733333333 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3333333333 20.6045352989 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319812362084 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130389174488 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066303364105 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219037582427 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516372222333 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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