Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
traveling is very beneficial for today's stressful life. nowadays, people involve with a lot of works, and they suffer extreme pressure in their life, so journeying is helpful to recovery themselves. some people believe that touring to foreign countries is more advantageous for individuals than in own country, although some others hold an opposite opinion. In my view, everyone gains more benefit by traveling abroad for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that children will progress in their life besides the positive outcome of responsibility if they be schooled how to administer themselves financially in the early age. nowadays, several elements – such as kind of job, level of financial knowledge, and so on – distinguish individual’s fate. In other words, education financial management as early as will ready children to take on their own responsibility in future. For example, when I was in high school, my parents always wanted me to participate in different issues such as shoping stuff, repairing worn things, so forth in order make me accustomed with financial matter indirectly. also, my everyday budget was limited to teach me how manange my money due to the fact personality everyone formed in childhood. As over time, I could accumulate much more saving that it led to become independent person financially, and eventually I got married earlier than other my same age young people. This experience taught me, learning monetary matter have positive effect on children’s responsibility.
another reason is that people who schooling financial theme in childhood are high self-confidence. if they deal with different circumstances and individuals, subsequently they will get more information about how to manage life, notably financially. By and large, increasing knowledge monetary caust to rising level of self-confidence directly. For instance, statistics have shown that people who take on their financially own responsible adults are more self-trust than who do not. For long years, researchers investigated two groups of children, one group who learned financial matters in childhoold while another one do not, in order to determine which group are self-confidence and autonomous. adults not schooling monetary subjects in childhood had a lot of problems such as lack of confidence in their life becaue they do not know how manage their own reponsible financially. However, people who were trained could gain more money easily and beome self-governing all over their life. As you can see, children will learn to be responsible if being taught at young age.
In conclusion, children will not be responsible in adulthood unless they are being taught how to manage their money in childhood. Not only does it cause individuals to progress in future, but also it increase people's self-confidence. children should were teached financial management in order to become responsible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, by and large, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45814977974 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16035623009 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550660792952 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9849099026 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.636363636 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24109175489 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745844915736 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676192252839 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150643705261 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067584049149 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.