Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
To begin with, putting too much money on advertisements will impact a businesses’ normal pace of developing. Although advertising is a great way to easily promote public to know and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and developing enterprises, making and showing advertisements are very expensive and difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of advancing. For example, there is smaller coffee shops opening near my boarding house last year. Before its managers decide to expend their businesses by showing some exorbitant advertisements on the TV programs and delivering some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effectively and efficiently advertise some significant information about their shops On TV and they also do not beneficially acquire some intense feedback and reaction from public. Wasting lots of on advertisements, this coffee shop cannot support other costs of materials, salaries, and house rents. In the end, it go bankrupt sooner. Therefore, lots of unnecessary advertisements will badly affect a companies’ normal pace of progressing.
In addition, some unsuitable advertisements will bring opposite effects to customers. As for public, most people do not want to watch and know some advertisements in their daily life, specifically some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and boring posters emerging during the people’s watching process on TV, people will unquestionably hate these ads that impede them to quickly watch whatever they want. Moreover, if some smaller companies do not have enough funds to creatively make a beautiful advertisements showing to public. In this process, when people unconscionably see these posters, they will product some considerations that this companies is very lazy and very outdated. Afterward, these boring advertisements will also make companies loss more and more customers. Therefore, it is logical to say that some unsuitable advertisements will bring lots of bad effect on customers.
Indeed, people have to acknowledge that great advertisements is a advantageous way to popularize one enterprises and successfully attract more customers. However, people also have to stand up some issues that these successful cases are very few. Hence, if companies tend to make lots of advancements, the best way is to make more improvements on their products and services, making their companies comprehend abilities can gradually develop.
To sum up, I completely disagree with this statement that In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a company' or simply 'companies'?
Suggestion: a company; companies
...and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and de...
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the funds') or simply say ''most funds''.
Suggestion: most of the funds; most funds
...difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of adv...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'progressed'.
Suggestion: progressed
... some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effec...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and...
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Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cknowledge that great advertisements is a advantageous way to popularize one ente...
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Line 4, column 98, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one enterprise', 'an enterprise', or simply 'enterprises'?
Suggestion: one enterprise; an enterprise; enterprises
...nts is a advantageous way to popularize one enterprises and successfully attract more customers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55072463768 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30169470005 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533816425121 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3048651794 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220500849571 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750675466615 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107985471477 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200707371976 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175659224447 0.0645574589148 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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