Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
To begin with, putting too much money on advertisements will impact a businesses’ normal pace of developing. Although advertising is a great way to easily promote public to know and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and developing enterprises, making and showing advertisements are very expensive and difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of advancing. For example, there is smaller coffee shops opening near my boarding house last year. Before its managers decide to expend their businesses by showing some exorbitant advertisements on the TV programs and delivering some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effectively and efficiently advertise some significant information about their shops On TV and they also do not beneficially acquire some intense feedback and reaction from public. Wasting lots of on advertisements, this coffee shop cannot support other costs of materials, salaries, and house rents. In the end, it go bankrupt sooner. Therefore, lots of unnecessary advertisements will badly affect a companies’ normal pace of progressing.
In addition, some unsuitable advertisements will bring opposite effects to customers. As for public, most people do not want to watch and know some advertisements in their daily life, specifically some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and boring posters emerging during the people’s watching process on TV, people will unquestionably hate these ads that impede them to quickly watch whatever they want. Moreover, if some smaller companies do not have enough funds to creatively make a beautiful advertisements showing to public. In this process, when people unconscionably see these posters, they will product some considerations that this companies is very lazy and very outdated. Afterward, these boring advertisements will also make companies loss more and more customers. Therefore, it is logical to say that some unsuitable advertisements will bring lots of bad effect on customers.
To sum up, I completely disagree with this statement that In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a company' or simply 'companies'?
Suggestion: a company; companies
...and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and de...
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the funds') or simply say ''most funds''.
Suggestion: most of the funds; most funds
...difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of adv...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'progressed'.
Suggestion: progressed
... some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effec...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54178674352 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30514760603 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564841498559 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9134536867 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.117647059 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218795456992 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790559251319 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115735164215 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241970102763 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185286532259 0.0645574589148 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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