Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
The advent of information age open an new era, which lead most people can easily contact with global information by using smart phone or searching something online. Because of this booming era, advertising is gradually become a advantageous way to effectively popularize a companies’ products and other information. Hence, some people consider that companies should put more money into advertising if they want to become successful. From my point of view, I disagree with this statement.
To begin with, putting too much money on advertisements will impact a businesses’ normal pace of developing. Although advertising is a great way to easily promote public to know and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and developing enterprises, making and showing advertisements are very expensive and difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of advancing. For example, there is smaller coffee shops opening near my boarding house last year. Before its managers decide to expend their businesses by showing some exorbitant advertisements on the TV programs and delivering some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effectively and efficiently advertise some significant information about their shops On TV and they also do not beneficially acquire some intense feedback and reaction from public. Wasting lots of on advertisements, this coffee shop cannot support other costs of materials, salaries, and house rents. In the end, it go bankrupt sooner. Therefore, lots of unnecessary advertisements will badly affect a companies’ normal pace of progressing.
In addition, some unsuitable advertisements will bring opposite effects to customers. As for public, most people do not want to watch and know some advertisements in their daily life, specifically some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and boring posters emerging during the people’s watching process on TV, people will unquestionably hate these ads that impede them to quickly watch whatever they want. Moreover, if some smaller companies do not have enough funds to creatively make a beautiful advertisements showing to public. In this process, when people unconscionably see these posters, they will product some considerations that this companies is very lazy and very outdated. Afterward, these boring advertisements will also make companies loss more and more customers. Therefore, it is logical to say that some unsuitable advertisements will bring lots of bad effect on customers.
Indeed, people have to acknowledge that great advertisements is a advantageous way to popularize one enterprises and successfully attract more customers. However, people also have to stand up some issues that these successful cases are very few. Hence, if companies tend to make lots of advancements, the best way is to make more improvements on their products and services, making their companies comprehend abilities can gradually develop.
To sum up, I completely disagree with this statement that In order for a business to be successful, it must put more money into advertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
The advent of information age open an new era, which lead most people can eas...
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Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ng era, advertising is gradually become a advantageous way to effectively popular...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a company' or simply 'companies'?
Suggestion: a company; companies
...and buy a great number of products from a companies. Nevertheless, as for some small and de...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the funds') or simply say ''most funds''.
Suggestion: most of the funds; most funds
...difficult, which might waste companies’ most of funds and other valuable opportunities of adv...
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Line 3, column 704, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'progressed'.
Suggestion: progressed
... some flyer, this coffee shop is stably progress. However, this coffee shop do not effec...
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Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y some unreasonable advertisements. For a instance, if there are lots of ugly and...
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Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cknowledge that great advertisements is a advantageous way to popularize one ente...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one enterprise', 'an enterprise', or simply 'enterprises'?
Suggestion: one enterprise; an enterprise; enterprises
...nts is a advantageous way to popularize one enterprises and successfully attract more customers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2714.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5387755102 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26338208621 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504081632653 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6654283056 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.083333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238508013398 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785564629148 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102826700938 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192830953299 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157902129154 0.0645574589148 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.