Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides. People must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusion. After all, each and every questions or topic require s careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to a truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that it is easier for people who are more like others to succeed than it is for those who are different from everyone, I strongly think such opinions lack coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, history has proven that those who may be considered peculiar or even eccentric are even more remembered by the masses for the following reasons.
First and foremost, the majority of individuals would agree with the notion that being average or normal is not something that people should strive to achieve, which is a belief that is surprisingly obvious. The main reason behind this rationale is that being excellent and outstanding at something are not easy to accomplish and thus deemed unbelievable and strange at the same time! In other words, when we closely look at the wealthiest and most acclaimed figures in today’s world, we will quickly notice that they are not like most people! To illustrate more thoroughly, Bill Gates, the owner and founder of Microsoft, is a household name in the twenty-first century and it would actually be embarrassing to be unaware to know what he’s done. How many people like Bill Gates do you know? Have you or your one friend ever started at a computer company? Do you know who got accepted to Harvard University and then dropped out? I think the picture by now through this series rhetorical, yet effective questions. All in all, we can’t and shouldn’t overlook the fact that being average or normal isn’t something that makes people stand out or succeed.
On top of this, being like everyone else and thinking like everyone else is not going to increase the chances of one succeeding. In the eye of many people in present-day society, new and better or different things are placed on a pedestal since technology has made it so hard for everyone to be original. Needless to say, as” there is nothing new under the sun”. It’s extremely crucial and admirable to think or do something that distinct, thereby being different. A great example of this to be inventions and innovations of all shape and sizes. The truth of the matter is, if we were all like everyone else, there would be no improvement or changes in the world. We would all be stuck in the stone ages and be huddled around a campfire praying for more thunder and lightning! Sometimes, different may be bad because all the new ideas are not logical. However, the beauty of being dissimilar and thinking differently is that, from time to time, there are groundbreaking and mind blowing ideas! Think about how the smartphone came to fruition. At first, we are yelling. Then, Someone got tired and decided to use pigeons. At the same time, others were making smoke clouds with a campfire and burning themselves quite badly. Then the telegraph was suddenly invented and many people back the actually thought that the telephone would be unnecessary! How wrong were those people? It goes without saying that if nobody thought differently, we would not have the telephone or these wonderful devices called smartphone which most people can’t live without. Long story short, it's clear as day to me that being different and think differently is not only beneficial but also essential to progress.
In summary, yes, it’s virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out on the given essay topic, we can come to a mutual agreement that being “different” is something that people should not be ashamed of because the world does not acknowledge or praise average and normal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, after all, i think, in summary, you know, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 48.0 15.1003584229 318% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 13.8261648746 275% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3252.0 1977.66487455 164% => OK
No of words: 655.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96488549618 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05894927669 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76541612925 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 349.0 212.727598566 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532824427481 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1026.0 618.680645161 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.0347284245 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.142857143 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3928571429 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315930418013 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765471706284 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570721649261 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179447693383 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448887731064 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 86.8835125448 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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