Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
I always asked myself that would it better to let my parents and others, like advisors, made my important decisions when I was teenager? I read a lot of books and articles and talked with many peoples about this issue. I found that there is a lot different attitudes about it. Actually, it is a controversial and many of advisors and psychologists did important research about it. Considering my own situation right now, I prefer that parents and others make their teenagers important decisions for several reasons; they are experienced, aware about their children’s talents. In addition, teenagers unable to make right decisions for their life’s critical issues.
First, parent and others, I mean advisors, are more experienced than teenagers. This help them to make right decisions at the right time. They was teenager and passed it with precious experiences. For example, my cousin did not eager to apply for computer engineering several years ago. His parents insisted on this major and finally, he applied for it. Now he a senior engineer in a leading software company. He always talk about his parent’s role in his success.
Second, our parents are aware about our talents and skills. It helps them to make a strategic plan for their teenager’s future with regarding their talents and interests. They know that talent and passionate to do a task is a fundamental factor to reach desired goals. For instance, one of my relatives was fired from school because teachers believe that she could not concentrate on her courses. As their parents knew that she was interested in dancing and dancers have higher incomes, they registered her in a dance class. Now, she is a famous dancer and she is a sort of celebrity and their parents are proud of her. Thus, parent’s decision can be the best at the time.
Finally, teenagers are not able to decide right decisions. Their brain is not develop enough to analyze factors and situations in an appropriate manner. Most of their decisions are depend on emotional rather than cognitional. Also, they are more passionate to follow friends, then, this indicates that they are not aware about consequences of their decisions. My uncle is a policeman. He hates this job. When I ask him “why did you choose this job?” he respond me that it was his friend’s decision, not him. In fact, he just tried to be part the group by registering in police department. So, as most of teenager’s decisions are based on their sentiments, they mostly regretful in future.
In conclusion, teenagers are in very critical period of their life. They shouldn’t permit to decide rest of their life alone because they are impulsive in decision making. They usually not steady with their decision because of life’s circumstances. As solution, they can get help from others like parents and advisors. Even, I believe that parents are more qualified to make their decisions because they are more experienced because they pass this period of time several years ago, and their experiences let them to have a plan for their teenagers. As the result, if you want your teenagers will be prosperous, do not let them to decide their important decisions solely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ked with many peoples about this issue. I found that there is a lot different att...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: PERS_PRONOUN_AGREEMENT_SENT_START[7]
Message: Use third-person plural verb with 'they': 'are', 'were'.
Suggestion: are; were
...right decisions at the right time. They was teenager and passed it with precious ex...
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Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'talks'.
Suggestion: talks
...n a leading software company. He always talk about his parent's role in his suc...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'developed'.
Suggestion: developed
...ide right decisions. Their brain is not develop enough to analyze factors and situation...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate manner" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nough to analyze factors and situations in an appropriate manner. Most of their decisions are depend on ...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ate manner. Most of their decisions are depend on emotional rather than cognitional. A...
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Line 7, column 464, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'responds'.
Suggestion: responds
...s;why did you choose this job?' he respond me that it was his friend's decisi...
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Line 7, column 699, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...their sentiments, they mostly regretful in future. In conclusion, teenagers are in ver...
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Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'deciding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: deciding
... their life. They shouldn't permit to decide rest of their life alone because they a...
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Line 9, column 459, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...more experienced because they pass this period of time several years ago, and their experience...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 99.0 43.0788530466 230% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2701.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05805243446 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87005837176 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475655430712 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 839.7 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 30.0 9.59856630824 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8394014083 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1714285714 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2571428571 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230186370537 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615022895806 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520514603478 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144195065143 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435081772509 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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