Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the ancient time, many people were not concentrate on their children's education, but as times pass by, the present parents are eager to stay with their children together in the education. Regarding to this phenomenon, I believe in two reasons: the assignments from teachers and the stress from the social culture.
To begin with, the parents today are involved in more because of the policy by the schools. To elaborate, the assignments conducted from the schools encourage the parents to take part with their children. Even though the parents are busy in working, they still have to spend time with their children to complete the children's school work. In the end, the parents today are forced to be accompanied with these children.
On the other hand, another factor is that the family concept of the society. In many modern researches indicates that the family accompanied is the main reason for the good education towards the children. Since the view of the studies, in order to have a good influence to the youngsters, the parents are under the pressure from this concept of the society. As a result, the parents in the present usually do more effort to stay with their children.
To sum up, the modern people are join much more in their children than past due to the pressure from the society and the schools' policy. That is, I agree with the statement that parents today are more involved in children's education than were parents in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...o the pressure from the society and the schools policy. That is, I agree with the state...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, regarding, so, still, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1209.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 250.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.836 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.464142853 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 212.727598566 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3869222589 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397351166194 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168407595923 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145607118503 0.0737576698707 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260902081014 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116399554445 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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