Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today sophisticated world, having a successful job is extremely important in being successful in life. Some people believe that unlike the past, it is much easier today to predict which career leads to more prosperous future, while many others opposite this notion. I personally concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in the past, there was a little if any competition among job seekers because of low population density in comparison to modern society. Typically, severe competitions among individuals for any kind of careers create a difficult situation to find a prosperous job. In the past, large numbers of job vacancies were available to individuals because of small populations, and had a job seeker wanted to be more successful in his occupation, he would have searched about high-salary jobs and took one of them. Since there were no strong competitions for getting job positions, there was a little fluctuation in the salary and economic situation of any type of jobs. The reason is that, back then, a few determined and finite factors might have affected the economic situation and income of any certain occupation. People identified those factors and established their own occupations with high income. In that situation, high-status and high-wage careers were stable for a long time, and human beings chose their jobs with lack of anxiety about remarkable changes in the future popularity and prosperity of their jobs.
Secondly, recent advancements in technology have made the life more complex, and people are not ensured about the future of their careers since many different factors play significant roles in the success of an occupation. Indeed, today business owners have to consider and cope with many factors affecting the future of their jobs, and lack of an individual factor might adversely influence the future of their job or even lead to collapse of their business and occupation and bankruptcy and other financial issues appear afterwards. For instance, today, if a person decides to produce shoe as his occupation, he has to pay careful attention to matters such as the taste of today people form child to adult individuals, the effect of trends on the marketing and sailing of shoes in the future, and many other factors that can be critical in the sell rate of shoe in current market and also future market. By contrast, in the past, buyers of shoes, did not pay attention to many things to buy a pair of shoes. Their tastes were not as wide as today costumers. Therefore, it was much easier to predict the future of markets.
In conclusion, today market is much more unpredictable and having a prosperous job cannot be conveniently identified. Not only today high population density elevated competitions among applicants for jobs, but also complexity of today marketing has been raised because of
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07916666667 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80322235214 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514583333333 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.1969865037 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.444444444 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16535365184 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581922308038 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356520270818 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995953682952 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527922959742 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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