Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's sophisticated world, government investments always are a matter of debate since the appropriate allocation of the budget could have a considerable effect on people and the community. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that it is more beneficial than the government spends money on supporting sports activities. In contrast, others hold the opposite point of view that arts are more important in order to dedicate the budget. Personally, I concur with the idea that government should spend money on championing athletic. I substantiate my point of view as follows.
To commence with, supporting activities such as state-sponsored lead to bringing significant amounts of money and increase the income of countries. To delineate, every country with sports teams have several opportunities to be the host of notable worldwide sport events like Olympics, world cups, or national leagues leading to absorbing tourist from abroad. In this connection, the tourist has to pay considerable money in respect to access accommodation, transportation, and eating food in visiting countries which have resulted in economic growth in host countries. As a result, should the government invest its budget in support athletics, the spending money not only will be compensated but also will return back in greater amount and development economics.
The second reason that comes to my mind is that athletes and athletic are impressive incentives encouraging individuals to play sport and do exercises and enhance public health, eventually. To put in a more vivid picture, in the recent era, the majority of people incline to a sedentary lifestyle since the advent of technology facilitates many tasks. Moreover, people are inundated with innumerable assignments inhibiting them to have regular exercise and predispose them the several diseases such as cardiovascular disease and diabetes. In this vein of thought, athletes by announcing the positive impact of sports on health could have a profound effect on spurring society to do exercise preventing a plethora of illnesses from ensues from a sedentary lifestyle. Therefore, should public health increase in society and the rate of disease decrease, the government will take advantage of this situation by saving the money that spends to diagnose and cure diseases or even allocate them to support arts.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly advocate the notion that it is more beneficial for the government to dedicate a budget for supporting sport and athletic activity. This is owing to the reason not only do the governments can yield higher income by being the host of national and international sports competition, but they also benefit from increasing public health stem from stimulated people for doing exercise by athletes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, as to, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2355.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40137614679 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04479625514 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520642201835 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3296865788 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.1875 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254498451632 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867806745793 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718995240875 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156886689167 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277868651987 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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