The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
It is an undeniable fact that family and family ties play a pivotal role in human being life. In this regard, some people approve of the tenet that extended family nowadays are less important in comparison to the past. On the contrary, others hold the opposite point of view that states that relatives have an inevitable influence on humankind's life in the contemporary era. Personally, I concur with the idea that the extended family's role in today's sophisticated world is one of the most notable aspects of people's life. I substantiate my idea with some elaboration as follows.
To commence with, family members such as grandparents, aunts, and uncle are treasure troves of experience and knowledge which is utterly advantageous in order to guide people into the right path in a predicament and rough circumstances. To put it a more vivid picture, by the passage of time, older relative gain valuable and precious experience since they have encountered a score of crisis and issues and have learned the strategy to cope with them. In addition, the young generation of relatives also has its unique experience and horizon in confronting problems. Taken this into consideration, should the person be exposed to a dilemma, consulting with family members and utilizing their opinion and experience in order to resolve the impasse will expand the person's knowledge and horizon about different aspects of the predicament and pave the way to achieve the optimum solution.
The second worth-mentioning reason is that the more extended family member, the more reduction in anxiety and stress and unleashing from daily pressure and injection of sense of joyfulness into the spirit. To delineate, family members love each other unconditionally and regardless of any give and take or reciprocity in a relationship. Under such circumstances, people can release their daily tensions which are overwhelming in today's hectic life in the family meetings without any concern of being exposed to judgment or blaming. Taken this into consideration. it is confirmed by solid research that people who have a strong emotional bond with their family, are less vulnerable to launch aggressive behavior or turning to pathological personality.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly advocate the notion that not only does not the importance of extended family become pale in comparison with the past, but it also is a major contributing factor to become prosperous in life. This is because extended family provides an opportunity in order to unleash stress and pressure of turbulent life and bring a sense of happiness and illuminate the correct path and resolve predicament by utilizing their experience, into the bargain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24711316397 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00000977834 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526558891455 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0327142023 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157013391581 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547424637599 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635412222122 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103676810442 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467700049918 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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