Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify which type of career or job lead you to a successful future.
Finding a descent, suitable, and high paying job have been a difficult challenge for graduate students. They are seeking various means to gather data about the advantages and disadvantages of careers to weigh them against each other. Some people believe that it was easier to identify a secure job in the past because jobs were not so diverse; on the other hand, from my vantage point, I believe that, nowadays it is easier to identify what type of job would lead you toward a successful future because we have access to numerous data about jobs and the information is more clear now in regard to the past.
First and foremost, due to diverse ways to get information, we can better identify a suitable career. In our modern era, we have access to the Internet and its vast websites, many magazines about finding jobs, and so on. As a result, we can make a decision much faster and with a better precision. Just by surfing some related websites about the range of salaries or their benefits such as health insurance, we can compare them together and reach a decisive conclusion. Conversely, by the technological revolution, people had access to very limited news about each job and their characteristics. Recently conducted research from a well-known university from my country shows that people searching the Internet for acquiring data from the web have a better chance to find a more secure job. Thus, the better we can find information, the higher we have the chance to become successful in the future.
Furthermore, the data we can find is much more reliable and clearer than the past. Due to high standard regulations and procedures in different countries, companies, businesses, organizations, and governments must publish precise information about their rate of salary, tax, working hours, insurance, and so forth. Consequently, we have a better chance to find these valid information and compare them to reach a conclusion. For example, construction companies, private companies, and industries release their entire policies on the Internet, so we can investigate through them and find the desired information. In contrast, in previous generations, our grandparents didn't have access to these approaches, and they must rely on their parents or their family members to decide which career would lead them to a bright future. Thus, the more flawless the means of gaining information, the more reliable finding the jobs.
All in all, although some people may think that due to simpler situations and limited jobs in the past people could find their desirable job, I strongly believe that due to our present facilities which pave the way for us to find wider and clearer information, we have a better chance in finding an appropriate profession. It will be predicted that by the 2050, people will have chosen their jobs only by gaining information from the Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, in regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05052631579 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84376247981 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490526315789 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.3077414284 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.277777778 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3888888889 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146215582488 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042996613152 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642766907744 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103975851939 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832944160584 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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