Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of humanity, people have confronted various dilemmas and have to make decisions to cope with them. From good locations to build as shelters and what to eat to more complex decisions like which job to choose are placed in this category. Although everything has become more intricate in today's society, I believe that nowadays young people are more dependent on themselves to make decisions than the past. This essay will explore some of the reasons for my perspective in the following paragraphs.
First of all, development of technology has led to an increase in the number of situations in which young people have to make decisions, but it also has provided special implements for them to get the information they need more easily than the past. In today's data-driven world, there are a lot of technologies that can help people in non-identical ways. I think a personal example can shed some light on this issue. A couple of years ago, I had to make the decision about the major that I was to study at university; thus, I need to know more about different jobs. My parents did not have enough information about every single job and the qualifications that I need to be successful in that particular field. Therefore, I decided to go online and check the details of all the plausible jobs. Thanks to the virtually limitless resources of the information offered by the new technologies, I could find much useful information about different jobs and therefore my dream job.
Secondly, improvement of the scientific approaches and the high degree of psychology proficiency of the experts in the recent century has offered young people many opportunities facilities to have a better interpretation of their own social behavior, which can help them to make better decisions on their own compared to the past. Youngsters are people who exhibit contrasting human qualities according to which they need different advice regarding their social behavior. Thus, by asking for help to have a better knowledge over their personality, they would be able to make correct decisions for their lives. Parents cannot provide their children with this knowledge. Back to my own experience for choosing a proper job, I called a counselor and asked his help for making the right decision. He explained about the diverse aspects of the special jobs that I had chosen and helped me to understand my abilities and personal preferences. Then, I could decide my major according to the new information that I had about myself. My parents could never help me to know this much about myself, and thus, they were not able to guide me towards the correct way.
On the whole, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I believe that people are more dependent on themselves to make decisions than past. Not only can they exploit the contributions of the technology including the Internet and social media, but they also can enlist the aid of professional experts rather than their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... than the past. This essay will explore some of the reasons for my perspective in the follo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, i think, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2489.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.978 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82061766285 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.426976601 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.523809524 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8095238095 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372921598868 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103589424904 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826811923751 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223887756396 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642334669949 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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