Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Development of technology has led to the increased opportunities for people to work harder and provide a better life for themselves, which in turn has resulted in extended working hours. Thus, most of the parents have less chances to be with their children, and they have to use their little time in best ways. While there are multiple advantages for parents to utilize that time to help children with their schoolwork, I believe that it is better for them to exploit it to have fun with their children. This essay will explore some of the reasons for my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that contributes to the higher significance of allocating time to play with children for working parents is the fact that they have enough time to teach their kids how to behave properly through playing games. To put it in other words, these parents have little time to help their children to learn contrasting human qualities that they need in order to survive in the society. Thus, games provide distinct chances for parents to do so in an interesting way. I think a personal example can shed some light on this issue. A couple of years ago, I studied in a very high-level school. My parents were very busy and we had little time to be together. Thus, my parents used to take me to the fairground or other various playing rooms to have fun after school. There, they spend some time on teaching me different social abilities, how to respect other children's rights, how to make friends, how to be successful in accomplishing a new activity and so forth.
Secondly, because children have little time to be with their working parents, it would be of major importance to be happy and have fun rather than spending that precious time on boring tasks like doing homework. In fact, children need to have fun with their parents even sporadically. Thus, being home rarely and spending the little available time on the least interesting activities, children would be deprived of this immensely special need. For example, my friend did not have enough time to have fun with her parents, and she used to spend her time with her parents on schoolwork. Thus, she does not like her parents now because she cannot remember any valuable moment or great memories of her past that involve her parents, too. Had she had beautiful moments with her parents during her childhood, she would feel more gratitude and respect for her family now.
On the whole, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I strongly cling to this idea that parents should spend their time playing with their children. Not only, this can help them to have the opportunity to improve their children's social behavior in an interesting way, but it also can help them to respond to an exceptionally important human need of their children that is having happy memories with their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, i think, in fact, in other words, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82555780933 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54306052395 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464503042596 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2498712445 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.95 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.65 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416837965026 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139165136805 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102782707593 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265973687827 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476217149292 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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