Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them. Today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although it is a difficult question to answer because it depends on generations, societies, and cultures, but I totally agree with that statement and I believe that young people in the past depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them, but today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. I hold this view because of several reasons.
Firstly, in such fast-paced modernized societies, by developing technology, people used to adapt themselves to new and modern facilities to make decisions rather than relying on traditional methods such as consulting to parents and depending on them. In other words, people nowadays prefer to make their crucial decisions by reckoning on scientific and knowlegeable approaches and identify their future career by themselves, since, people in the past tended to use their parents ideas when they determined to make decisions and they were mostly dependent on other people. Although consulting with parents and connoisseurs are beneficial method, but it does not necessarily lead to a secure result.
Secondly, it seems to me that making decisions independently is better than relying on other's opinion and pay attention to them merely, because if someone decide to do something based on only his interests and aspects, if he does not succeed, he will blame on only himself not others. For instance, when I was 15, I decided to choose mathematics as my field of study during my high school. My father primarily was against to my decision because he contended that biology would be better for me because of several reasons. But, I did not pay attention to my father's opinion and I chose mathematics. After a couple of years, although I got regretful, I was still glad because I made that decision based on my own opinion.
In general, by elapsing time, people's habits and beliefs are changing and nothing is similar to past anymore, thus young people in the past depended too much on their parents to make decisions, however, today individuals are willing to recognize their future path themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...independently is better than relying on others opinion and pay attention to them merel...
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
...tion to them merely, because if someone decide to do something based on only his inter...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for instance, in general, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0583090379 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78135638798 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536443148688 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.47729072 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.727272727 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1818181818 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465703942506 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152951420578 0.076458572812 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183045927134 0.0737576698707 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317762549324 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164746768408 0.0645574589148 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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