Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Decision making is an important pillar in our lives. We live in a complex and sophisticated world that required accurate and efficient decisions in our daily life. Some people support the statement that youngsters in the past rely on their parents too much comparing it to the present time; others would disagree. As far I am concerned, I believe that the young generation of nowadays is less dependable on the parents in taking decisions for two crucial reasons.
First, the technological advancement in our era augmented the independence of children from their parents. These days technology facilitate our daily chores and provide us with a huge amount of information with such easy and common mediums. This latter would raise our awareness of the world surrounding us at early ages. For example, when my little sister was born the internet was already introduced in many households in my country. We were fortunate enough to have this high-technology that time in our home. Basically, when my sister turned six years old, she was able to manipulate the computer and also was able to use the internet for a myriad of things: homework assistant online, buying from different stores using the credit card with the consent of our parents...etc. So, she was relying on herself doing multiple tasks without the intervention of any adults. As you can see, children have established more sense of self-reliance than their peers did, decades ago.
Second, the modernization of schools helped enormously to get the young people more dependent. The educational programs, nowadays, tend to get the children more involved in classrooms rather than just sitting and listening to the teacher. The programs are more engaging which would give the pupil confidence to be involved without having inner insecurities. For instance, my five years old nephew is studying in a primary school and I noticed something special in the program of the school. They do not use traditional teaching methods but they try to give the young man his own self-study path and the presence of the teachers inside the class is only to guide him not didactic him. In the case of the improving the reading skills, the teachers just give the pupils reading passages on the tablet and they try to let them discover by their own the way they should pronounce and speak in general by imitating a recording voice with the same passage. This experience unveils that we are witnesses of a young generation that is almost completely independent from their parents.
In sum, though some may do not agree with my reasoning, I truly have the sense that children or even teenagers are taking their decisions more freely than was the case years ago. Not only will because of the technological advancement but also the usage of practical and engaging teaching methods in schools. Parents should give their children more liberty in taking their own decisions to help them gain and experience the sense of responsibility at early ages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...e of children from their parents. These days technology facilitate our daily chores ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2494.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01810865191 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77128923914 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539235412475 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3560008638 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.363636364 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5909090909 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45454545455 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264433459346 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679079506436 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618733839554 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168456832883 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809105824325 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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