Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whether people would benefit more from their own country is weight on many aspect. However, the statement is based on generalization. Thus, learning more from their own country may not suitable for everyone.
It is so argued that people can learn lots of things in their state, because the language and culture in their home country is familiar to him, and they may not able to speak foreign language. So they could probably not realize anything, when they go to a foreign museum. Supporters of this argument must be reminded that nowadays there are lots of electronic devise which can translate the word or talk you do not know. In addition, there are plenty of information online telling the culture and habit of other places, people can just choose the country they familiar or closed to their own habit. By contrast, if you travel to other place, you may see the scenery or landscape that your own country does not have. For example, there isn't any desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese wants to looks those beautiful scenery in desert, the only way is to go abroad.
Supporters of people should stay and travel in home country may still argued that people should spend lots of money if they want to go outside. The real picture, however, is that people can take train or ship instead of taking airplane, if they have tight budget. The ticket of train or ship is mush less than airplane. Furthermore, if you travel to country where the average merchandise price is much lower than your home country. The money you spent on hotel, restaurant or ticket will be less than you travel at home. By comparison, the culture and experience you feel at foreign place is not able to be mimic in your home country. For instance, European may never realize the beautiful beach and slow path life in South East Asia, if they deny to go there. Citizens who live near equator may never see snow or build a snowman, if they insist in staying in home place.
So beneficial is traveling abroad that it must be taken into more serious consideration. The problem you would encounter at foreign place in the past can be fixed by technology. Besides, there are lots of distinct experience you can feel, when you travel outside your home country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether people would benefit more from their ow...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...ore from their own country is weight on many aspect. However, the statement is based on gen...
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Suggestion:
...ion online telling the culture and habit of other places, people can just choose ...
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Suggestion:
...ce, you may see the scenery or landscape that your own country does not have. For...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...untry does not have. For example, there isnt any desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese want...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'look'.
Suggestion: look
...desert in Taiwan, if Taiwanese wants to looks those beautiful scenery in desert, the ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'deny going', 'deny gonna'.
Suggestion: deny going; deny gonna
...w path life in South East Asia, if they deny to go there. Citizens who live near equator m...
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Suggestion:
...n you travel outside your home country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70588235294 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38303890414 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498721227621 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2856376546 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30932098842 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995139147863 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830890520918 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210927887955 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722381906294 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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