Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country that from traveling to foreign countries.
It has been shown through the centuries that people travel for different purposes. Some may take on business trips and some may consider traveling as a means of lowering their daily tensions and getting relaxed. When it comes to the recreational aspect of traveling, I, personally, believe that it's both beneficial and economical for people to go on a trip within their home country. I will provide some reasons and points hereunder to substantiate my idea.
To begin with, from an economic perspective, by traveling inside the country, people enjoy cheaper means of transportation and accommodation. To be more specific, the most used and convenient way of overseas trips is through airplanes, which forces passengers to spend more money on their commuting. However, since the distances are shorter within their own country, they can use other inexpensive options like buses, trains, or even their own private cars. Moreover, sometimes individuals may have the chance to stay in their acquaintances' homes. My real-life experience can drive this concept home. When I was heading to Germany, I had to pay for a considerable amount of money just to make sure the travel agency would do my travel arrangements properly. Not only had I been obliged to spend more money on my flight but also I threw away around a thousand dollars on the hotel fees during a week.
Secondly, getting in trouble during the vacation, it's more likely to get access to the help sooner inside the home country and not abroad. People are more familiar with the rules of their own lands and they will be able to reach their families and friends easier there. Therefore, in case of an emergency, they can simply enjoy these advantages. For instance, ten years ago, when I was traveling from the North to the South of our country, a bunch of thieves attacked me, and I had lost my luggage. The only asset I had was my carry-on bag which contained neither cash nor credit cards. As a result, since I had an emergency fund deposited in my bank account, I went to the nearest bank to make a withdrawal. Meanwhile, my father reached me as soon as possible for any further assists. Hadn't I been In our country, it would have been the worst travel experience for me.
To sum up, considering all the aforementioned points and reasons into account, people's will benefit more when they decide to move around their own country. It is because they can handle their trip more economically and because in urgent situations they can solve their problems easier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...travel for different purposes. Some may take on business trips and some may consider...
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Line 4, column 521, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...d lost my luggage. The only asset I had was my carry-on bag which contained neither...
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Line 4, column 787, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Hadn't
...on as possible for any further assists. Hadnt I been In our country, it would have be...
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Line 4, column 795, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'was', 'were'?
Suggestion: was; were
...ssible for any further assists. Hadnt I been In our country, it would have been the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87006960557 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69655282125 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554524361949 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1583396015 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9523809524 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236722609599 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654941302508 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574706648735 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147811385404 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380447146519 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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