Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern society, people spend a considerable amount of their daily hours working. The improvement of working conditions has sparked controversy among business owners. While some critics believe that more working days with shorter hours would be more satisfying for employees, others consider fewer workdays would be better. As far as I'm concerned, employees would be more satisfied by being at their office for fewer days weekly. The reasons and points to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated hereunder.
First of all, having several full days off would help employees to take care of their overall well-being effectively. To be more specific, it goes without saying that nowadays, people are under a lot of pressure during their working hours, and with the tough competition among other colleagues, they have to bear a heavy workload to show their potential and get a promotion or other generous benefits. Moreover, they have to undergo traffic jams during rush hours while commuting. As a result, even if they work for shorter hours, these accumulative tensions would result in draining their whole energy. It is crystal clear that if they do not have enough energy, they will not be inclined to do exercise or making healthy home-made meals. However, if they have more free time during the weak, they would be able to enroll in a gym or eat a much more balanced diet, leading to a more healthy lifestyle that can help their overall health in the long run.
In addition, well-rested staff can contribute to boosting the profits of the company, which could heighten their chance of getting a promotion or other generous benefits by their boss. To put this idea in a more vivid picture, when people rest for a sufficient amount of time, their minds work more effectively afterward. The same would happen if employees have enough time to rest before they come to the office. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I graduated from university, I started to work in a small company in our town. I had to complete my projects during the weak and there was not any limit to how much time I would spend at the office. Therefore, I chose to go to work for ten hours from Monday to Thursday, and I used other days to get more sleep and do my other hobbies. As a result, during working days, I could come up with innovative ideas whenever the company encountered a problem. My boss was pleased with my high efficiency. Since the company earned a large sum of money because of my hard work, the boss promoted me to a higher position with a competitive salary. Needless to say, it improves not only my self-esteem but also my living conditions.
In light of the aforementioned reasons and points, one could conclude that a shorter workweek with longer working hours each day would be more gratifying for the workforce. It is because employees can enhance their overall well-being and because their boosted productivity at work aids them in achieving a more wealthy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.869140625 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64755513394 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521484375 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2071029384 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.875 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20565150415 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646116384229 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492008306892 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144588440269 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00943342601754 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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