Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
In the modern era, it is no secret that people are facing a quick shift in every aspect of their lives. However, the impact of this trend has sparked controversy among critics. While some consider that our ever-shifting world is positively influencing on people's sense of happiness, others believe that its disadvantages outweigh its merits. Personally, I believe that the rapid modification of the world is enhancing people's sense of gratification and delight. The reasons and points to substantiate this point of view are elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, in the present day, there is an upsurge in the number of newly-introduced learning methods and equipment, which is helping students to enjoy a faster and more satisfying learning process. To put this into a more vivid picture, thanks to the new technology, smartphones and its applications, computers, and the internet has revolutionized the students' way of studying. An illustration can drive this fact home. When I was studying in high school, I was utterly torn by learning English vocabularies for my English class, so I always a lower score during the exams. Every day, when I went back from school, I used to read a book with myriads of words, but no progress was made. Years went by, and modern technology invented smartphones, and now, I'm using an application named "Anki" designed for this purpose. I can memorize hundreds of words without getting frustrated. It has an innovative setting, making learning words as if you are playing games. Each day, it asks me the words which I learned before, and if I answer the questions correctly, I can move on to the next step. It is actually making me more enthusiastic of learning a new language. Had not smartphones been invented, I could not have been able to enrich my English vocabulary at a fast pace and improve my scores.
Furthermore, medical science is also influenced by the daily-developing means of treatments, which is contributing noticeably to people's overall health and happiness. To be more specific, every day were are observing more elaborate devices for diagnosing the most invisible illnesses at an early stage, assisting doctors in hindering the progression of serious diseases such as cancer. Needless to say, it is also lengthening people's life expectancy, which makes them more fulfilled and vibrant. For instance, I recently read an article in New York Times newspaper, claiming that fifty years ago, almost 65 percent of deaths around the world were caused by lung cancer, simply because doctors did not have any advanced means of recognizing their patients' illness. However, scientists not only achieved a new technique of blood test for distinguishing lung cancer symptoms but also pharmacists are improving more potent medicine alleviating the side effects of the disease significantly. As a result, the rate of people's demise due to lung cancer has declined to 20 percent over a short period.
In light of the reasons and points mentioned above, people nowadays are much more happy and contented with changes around the world than they were in several years ago. It is because new technology is inaugurating students more user-friendly means of education, and because the revolutionized medical science is helping people to live longer and healthier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 760, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...chnology invented smartphones, and now, Im using an application named 'Anki&a...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ppiness. To be more specific, every day were are observing more elaborate devices fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, while, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2783.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1921641791 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04042377599 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561567164179 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 862.2 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2863308599 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.958333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163941616134 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041170280631 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050159487856 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115783746495 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715675260817 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.