Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
People learn things better from those at their own level - such fellow students or co-workers- than from those at a higher level, such teachers and supervisor
Improving our abilities and skills is one way to search for a better life. Personally, I believe that our bosses and superiors are the ones that are in a better position to guide us than our peers or fellow co-workers.
First, people in high positions like supervisors or teachers not only have the content knowledge, but they also have the expertise to communicate and pass the relevant information to their subordinates. For example, when I was in college I took physics with Pierre, a friend of mine, he was very good at his sciences, especially in physics. I was struggling to understand and feared I could not pass the exams. I asked him to tutor me for my mid-terms, no matter how willing he was to help me, I could not grasp his information. I got so frustrated, finally, I had to ask my professor for help. In a matter of a few minutes, I was able to understand all the vital information I needed to pass my exams. After all, it was not how good my friend Pierre was at physics, it was the way the professor managed to explain the relevant information to me.
Moreover, young people do not often weigh in all the options when making decisions. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After graduation, I tried to start a software company. I outlined all my projects very carefully and spend days and weeks pursuing the best technologies that were out there at that time. I almost committed myself with a bank loan to start my project. At that point, and just by chance, I met with one my former professors, he listed to me very carefully, I knew he liked the project a lot, but at some point, he made a comment regarding the most mundane facts that I have not thought of, like renting a place or paying my taxes. After all, there is more than just technology when putting a software business together.
All in all, I believe that our superiors and teachers are in a better position to lead us and teach us. We can learn from them, not only because they have the knowledge, but because they have the expertise to communicate the facts
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... me, I could not grasp his information. I got so frustrated, finally, I had to as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, after all, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51466666667 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69188079644 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509333333333 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3141421427 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0555555556 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111639355981 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329492656318 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.024936834535 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676112789407 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114182471427 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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