Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Life is a gift of God and we should spend it wisely instead of wasting it. While some people are inclined toward the attitude that a person should not take care about anything except the activities that gives joy, whereas, other people hold different perspective. I personally, though believe that there are a lot of essential things to work on and without it it becomes difficult to live sometimes. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that womens must takecare of their homes and kids and mens have to do their job honestly. For example when I was young girl with a lot of dreams some of those were unnecessary like to be an adult and do parties as an independent women. At that time my mother taught me the difference in real life and taught me to work hard on my studies once you will be grown up and having a good job you can do everything thing. I told my friend the words of my mother she denied and kept doing what se want for enjoyment. Now she got a job as cleaning lady and I am the chief president of my company. Therefore, this example illustrates that keep unimportant things at second priority.
Secondly, people do not like to work nowadays. They spend most of the time by using different applications on phones which are useless rather than doing the things which their parents tells. The consequences are worst of such activities because they take individuals to the wrong path. To exemplify, when I was in high school and loved to upload all stuff on Instagram, but my parents said and explain me not to do it is not good either you love it. At the time, I was so stubborn and later my account got hacked and some boys blackmailed me than I realize we should not do all the things that we personally enjoy.
In the light of the above mentioned reasons I strongly believe that people should draw attention on important things whether it is fun or not instead for doing wrong things that is for enjoyment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, honestly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46341463415 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49944140762 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536585365854 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2216762184 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9375 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367593119678 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112403990119 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788862340049 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214841957018 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886819314665 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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