In the world pervaded by TV programs with notable celebrities, people incline to be influenced by them who live high standards. According to the following reasons and my personal experience, I agree that people today spend too much time on things they like instead of things they are supposed to do.
First, the internet is full of photos posted by ultra-rich people. It is easy for people who are watching them feel unsatisfied with their living and further pursue the same image of luxurious lives. A case in point is Instagram, wealthy people upgrades photos with delicate food and beauty spots they went. This leads normal people who live on fixed salaries to be seduced by high-standard of living. They start to pursue such a rosy life with limited income. Finally, people will feel guilty about this way of addicting to personal enjoyment rather than working hard and enhancing their ability.
Secondly, when people grow up, happiness gets seldom to include them. The dazzling world with its myriad temptations drives people to search for happiness from the exterior instead of the interior. Specifically, I often experience worried thoughts with the pressure of university entrance examination. That is, I turn to amusement such as drinking a chocolate smoothie in Starbucks but not preparation for the exam. On the contrary, in my childhood, I study the whole day unless my parents asked me to eat dinner then I would stop learning and leave my room.
Last but not least, although experts put emphasis on people should not do too much work, the truth is people do have too much personal entertainment. Take my friend, David, for instance, he clubs every night dancing with hot girls after work. However, after 1 am when David takes the taxi to go back home, the feeling of lonely starts to pervade his soul. He knows that the next day will be a rough day to face with. Oppositely, what he should do to prepare himself for tomorrow’s tasks is to go exercise rather than clubbing all night.
To conclude, when people grow up, dissatisfaction grows larger too. That is the reason why they search leisure activities outside and ignore what they are supposed to do. If people take seriously on their responsibility, temptations can merely be peripheral.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97375328084 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70021981083 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608923884514 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7781911774 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2380952381 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315281773721 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820042568612 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125693140644 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185269715968 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122264963569 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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