It's a highly debated issue whether or not people spend a lot of their time to have something fun for them or working so hard and try to do not waste their time in something is not worth to pursue, and this point can be approached from several angels due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating over this issue, I think everyone should do whatever they want, doesn't matter if it just for fun or doing their accountability.
The exquisite point to be mentioned here is that people should monitor their schedule so they can do both matters at the same time. Needless to say, to have some joyfulness will contribute significantly to the psychological well-being. For example, when my kids have so much homework, they are starting to be so mad, exhausted and complaining so much. Admittedly, when I offering something fan and they like doing it, they are finishing their work so fast with no error found.
In addition, Nowadays technology has a vital role in our life, and consider as a much joyfulness matter everyone had. Its make the life easier and bearable. We can do our work and the fun thing that we love simultaneously. For example, I hate pay pills, nevertheless I did it by using technology which makes it easier and faster.
As the matter of the fact, there is another subtle point which must be bone in mind, in 21 century, the life becomes more complex and has so fast rhythm, which means increasing in our accountability, which leads to enlargement of our stress, effort, and pressure. In this case, we have to have a lot of fun things to stress out our selves.
Due to the aforementioned, I strongly agree with this statement. This does not say the other viewpoints are wrong, but I think the reasons I provided in favor of my opinion are strong.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nevertheless, so, well, for example, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62619808307 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7846451826 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555910543131 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2417795275 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244230487777 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847624202656 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903811868852 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120342730395 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862227525742 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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