Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment – doing thins they like to do – rather than doing things they should do.
Even though some people would say that today they are spending more time with personal enjoyment activities, rather than doing their duties, I think the opposite to this. I am inclined to believe that work hustle is responsible for depriving people from their possibilities to have more free time. I think this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and furthermost, nowadays due to economic crises, many people have to work for more hours or they hold a second job to be able to provide a reasonable life for their families. Some, besides their immediate family also have some obligation with another member part of the extended family. For instance, in my country it is normal for a professor to work in three different schools managing a schedule amongst morning, afternoon and evening classes. Other people hold a job during the day and work as a freelancer as soon as they’re home in order to supplement their income. This journey leaves no space for pleasure.
Secondly, another point I would like to discuss which supports my argument is that there’s other group of people who sometimes does not need any extra money. But ambition makes them to deprive themselves of their enjoyment activities to support a high standard way of living. For example there is many celebrities that can live only by the profits of their own fortune, but they choose to continue working until their bodies cannot stand anymore.
In conclusion, I believe that each day more and more people are committed with their duties instead of enjoy their lives. This because some group must to work harder to sustain their families, and pay their bills, while for other group work is an option, but their ambition takes away any possibility of life enjoyment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are many celebrities'?
Suggestion: there are many celebrities
...igh standard way of living. For example there is many celebrities that can live only by the profits of th...
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Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...oy their lives. This because some group must to work harder to sustain their families, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97342192691 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55683187012 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4867199112 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.153846154 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127968644236 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513501847378 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885375319567 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0899908925905 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856346472045 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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