Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are plenty of places where people can enjoy themselves, and all of these places are amusing and relaxing for everyone. As a result, people will utilize those to release everyday stress. Personally, I agree with the statement above that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment.
To begin with, I would say people are spending time on things that they enjoy rather then other stuff that need to be done. I believe this comes from fast moving live which produce to much stress for everyone and making people to think about doing activities that help them to forget the pressure that the everyday live serves for them. For example, I work in a busy pharmacy and I feel so tired phisically and mentaly in the end of the day. And almost every day I go out for dinner or coffee with my frinds where we can forget a little bit what happened during the day. The problem here is , because I also have to study after work, despite this I do thinks that I enjoy more like hangging out with friends rather than stuffs I need to get done.
Furthermore, there are things that we want to try out, new things that we have never done before in our lives, and the couriosity pushes us all to get there and enjoy new experiences. For instance, the other day one of my friends asked me to go in a ski lift. I didn't know if I will enjoy it or not because i had never tried it before.On the other hand, I wanted to try something new in my live so, I accepted her invitation. I would say it was the bes experience I ever had. I did this because I liked it , and not because I had to do it. Those are some of the reasons why people do different activities that they are not required to do.
In conclusation, my idea is that live is beautiful but short, so I like to enjoy it as much as I can and not to put pressure in myself or doing only things I have to.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...g time on things that they enjoy rather then other stuff that need to be done. I bel...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...mes from fast moving live which produce to much stress for everyone and making peo...
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Line 2, column 532, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ee with my frinds where we can forget a little bit what happened during the day. The probl...
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Line 2, column 592, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ened during the day. The problem here is , because I also have to study after work...
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Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...friends asked me to go in a ski lift. I didnt know if I will enjoy it or not because ...
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Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... know if I will enjoy it or not because i had never tried it before.On the other ...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...not because i had never tried it before.On the other hand, I wanted to try somethi...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... ever had. I did this because I liked it , and not because I had to do it. Those a...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...d not because I had to do it. Those are some of the reasons why people do different activit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.20728291317 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30656815873 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518207282913 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7307261858 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.133333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299872855199 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101642166837 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103112513803 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181158056112 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222306183961 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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