It is better for people to choose jobs that provide high salaries or jobs that enjoy but provide low salaries
There is no doubt that jobs plays a significat role in our lives. I believe that people should choose to do a job that they enjoy the most. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, when you decide to do something you like, you will have less stress in your work place. You will be happy every morning when you wake up to go to work. This affects our lives in a possitive way. Being satifsied with what you do, keeps you healthy. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I work in a pharmacy as pharmacy technician and I love my job. That place is the perfect place I want to because I get to help people in need and that makes me feel happy. The place is very relaxed and there is no stress at all, therefore I am healthy mentally and physically. As we all know being stressfull causes a lot of illneses, like hight bloot pressure, high cholesterol and even diabetes. Until now, I do not have any of these conditions, and this is due to the job I do. I enjoy it and it does not give me the pressure that would cause any health issue.
Furthermore, if you work in a place that you really like, you will be more succesful. For instance, my best friend always wanted to be a teacher. After she finished the university and became a math teacher, she got a job in the middle school. She enjoys teaching in school, and because she is very good at math, she teaches private course as well. She is so succesful in her job, and also famous in her area. People respect and value her because sh is helping them or their children get good grades in math. This is the reason why I think you should do something that you enjoy more.
Taking everything into consideration, I would say that when we choose the job we need to focus on something we like, so we can always be healthy, happy and succesful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eel happy. The place is very relaxed and there is no stress at all, therefore I a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24507042254 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37030829983 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540845070423 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3274073063 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.5 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131049971951 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434097410452 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523071174762 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101416955572 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579527472677 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 11.7677419355 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.07 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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