Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people's live is very dynamic and crowded with too many stuff that requires a specific attention and procedures to follow in order to get things done properly. In my view, the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are where they were supposed to be and affordable. I disagree that the rules today are very strict and hard to follow.
Rules and procedures help the society to grow faster. These are the ways that showing us the path we need to follow to achieve our goals and to make our dreams come true. For example, by the time when I was in high school, one of the rules there, was to have one hour exercise every day before the school started. We all wanted to be healthy and stress released and that exercise in the morning helped us a lot to achieve our goal. It is true that we were required to do that but it was for our best. So, we needed to follow that school's rule but in the end we were so happy they required us to do so. Because we felt in good shape mentally and physically.
Furthermore, if a society has strict rules, it helps people to feel equal. They will be aware about the rules they need to follow for everything, but they will feel equal. Following rules means to fight the corruption all over the world. For instance, back in my country people do not follow the rules and state regulations properly. As a result there is a big corruption and people are not treated equal. The one who has the power wins. Last year, my brother finished teaching school and he applied for a job in our elementary school. Even though he had all the qualifications that were required by the school, he did not get the job. They hired someone else who do not have the required qualifications by the school but he was wealthy and had the power. That happened because people there only have the rules written on the paper, but are not strictly demanded to follow them. If they would be more serious in following the rules, my brother would get that job.
In summary, having in consideration that the young people are the future of one society or state it is very important to teach them properly. Asking them to follow and obey the rules is the best way to have a productive society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: much stuff; a good deal of stuff
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Suggestion:
... are very strict and hard to follow. Rules and procedures help the society ...
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... good shape mentally and physically. Furthermore, if a society has strict rul...
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Suggestion:
...ules, my brother would get that job. In summary, having in consideration that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, as for, as to, for example, for instance, in summary, as a result, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44390243902 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32775458413 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1286991353 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2173913043 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280202882906 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090298938515 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804571117681 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196925871813 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986485431347 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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