Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people are watching movies and other programs in television for long period of time during the day. In my opinion, I think that this behavior have a negative impact for them. I feel this way for some reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, staying in front of the television's screen is unhealthy for all of us. I hold this opinion because it may affect our eyes in a negative way. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, about eight years ago, I used to watch all kind of movies, like horror, romantic, trailers and so on, and I was seating in front of the television for hours. After some time, like about after one year I realized that one of my eyes was hurting me. I went to the eye doctor, and he found out that I was not able to see the same with both eyes. He did give me some drops to put in my eyes and also he advised me to wear glasses. That is why I think that watching movies can be very harmful for people's health.
Furthermore, individuals that watch a lot of movies are less socialized. The have difficulties making friends or dealing with the people around them. They are not flexible when interacting with others. I can explain this from my friend's experience. When she was little kid, she was staying home alone, because her parents had to work, and of course she had nothing to do, but to watch cartoons. Later when she started to go to school, she had hard time making friends, and she was always so aggressive and easily distracted by others. It took her three years to adopt with the society and to start making friends. I started talking with her when we were in the fifth grade, because before that I was afraid to get closer to her. I was scared that she might think I want to hurt her, so I kept staying away from her. And she had this behavior because she was isolated in her house with just watching movies and go to sleep.
Taking everything into consideration, I would say that it is better to go outside and talk with friends, rather then looking at the screen all day long, because if will affect us negatively in many ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...d other programs in television for long period of time during the day. In my opinion, I think ...
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Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... opinion because it may affect our eyes in a negative way. My personal experience is a compelling...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...iculties making friends or dealing with the people around them. They are not flexible when interacting...
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Line 4, column 113, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...o outside and talk with friends, rather then looking at the screen all day long, bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, i feel, i think, kind of, of course, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34164588529 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33172016431 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521197007481 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1905706318 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1363636364 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2272727273 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11029130589 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396749910876 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030534532876 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748633296423 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355079598551 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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