Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most people agree that money nowadays become an essential part in our lives. I believe that people need to learn how to manage the money in order to stay financially stable. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, money plays a significat role for everyone in this world in terms of happiness. It is that thing that can make our dreams come true. I hold this opinion because of my own personal experience. When I was in high school five years ago, my classemates planned to visit Italy for three days. All of my close friends were able to go and have fun there.Also, it would have been a new and beautiful experience for all of us, especially for me. I say this because I hadn't had any chance before to travel at any country and see differend culture. However, I did not get the go that time as well. I was young and even though I was working that time, I did not have enough knowledge how to manage and save money. Therefore, I could not afford the fly ticket to Italy. That made me feel so sad and unhappy. If I get to learn how to manage the budget since I was child, I wold have been able to pay for the ticket, travel and be happy.
Secondly, if we know how to manage the money we will be able to live a healthier live as well. I feel this way, because we need money to buy healthy food or go to the gym, which is another way to keep our body healthy. For instance, my brother works for a bank. As we all know, at the bank he do not have the chance to move a lot. He works mainly in the conmputer and he stays at the chair all day. Because, he gets paid well, after work he goes to the gym for excercise. In that way he keeps himself healthy mentally anf physically. This can be possible only if you have the money to pay for it.
In conclusion, I believe that it is critical for us to know how to manage the money to keep ourselves both happy and healthy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ends were able to go and have fun there.Also, it would have been a new and beautiful...
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Line 2, column 474, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...especially for me. I say this because I hadnt had any chance before to travel at any ...
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Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... a bank. As we all know, at the bank he do not have the chance to move a lot. He w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.0875331565 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22302057095 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7720387464 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3913043478 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69565217391 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119908698661 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359661079691 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401769219897 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892514493954 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543741208322 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 11.7677419355 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.15 10.9000537634 56% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.44 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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