Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No doubt that children needs to be well ecucated at their young age for multiple things, including here the fact how to manage their money effectively.
I feel that way for couple reasons that I will share with you in this essay.
To begin with, being able to stay financialy stabel, would help us to live a better, helthier and an easier live. Nowadays, the money is something neccesary for us to do our everyday''s acctivities and I would say plays an important role to keep us healthy mentally ant phisically. I have learmed this from my own experience. Couple years ago when I first move in United States, I was new entry in this country and of course I did not have a regular full time job. I can say I felt very depressed and fearful of how I was going to live like that. I had a very limited boudget and was not sure if I will be able to pay my bills. So, that leaded me to a bad emotional situation. In addition the part time job I had made me phisically so tired, and my back hurted every single day when I was coming back from work. But, the good thing was that I was able to manage my boughet pretty well, so I surpass that hard period of my live without having any mental or phicological harm, and this because I was able to save the money I have made.
In addition, children who work since they are in oyung ages, become more responsible to save money, or to spend them wistely. A live exapmle is my brother. He start working in my father's restaurant when he was twelve years old. That time he only cleaned the tables and washed dishes. Because ho was getting tired doing that he learned the lesson to save the money, so one day he can became the owner and work less. And that is what happened. Now he is the owner of a small restaurant, and he is no longer getting that tired as before.
In summary, children needs to start saving money in their young age, and also they need to learn how to spend them in proper way. That will help them to live the life with less stress in their head.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... and of course I did not have a regular full time job. I can say I felt very depressed an...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e that. I had a very limited boudget and was not sure if I will be able to pay my...
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Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sure if I will be able to pay my bills. So, that leaded me to a bad emotional situation....
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ded me to a bad emotional situation. In addition the part time job I had made me phisica...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ad emotional situation. In addition the part time job I had made me phisically so tired, ...
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...stely. A live exapmle is my brother. He start working in my fathers restaurant when h...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...on to save the money, so one day he can became the owner and work less. And that is wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, i feel, in addition, in summary, no doubt, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24415584416 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22808095593 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1402075698 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150242808858 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425231320046 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536540595636 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107972679187 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506137575672 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.