Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Rules are a pivotal element for shaping society and individual personality. It restrains humans unusual activity and makes society more manageable. However, there are a plethora of people content that societies norm are very strict for young people and others disagree. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I cogently prefer the first one. I will elaborate on several reasons for holding this aspect in followings.
To commence with, today's world is so diverse that young people can easily be spoiled, so their parents are concerned with this situation. They employ some obligation and rules upon the children to provide a better future. Moreover, young children are less experience about the obstragal of life and they follow the path of the current flow of society. Therefore, parents warn them and confine their flow. Besides, parents always try to make happy their children at any cost which sometimes makes them distract from their goal. For instance, suppose a kid playing video games during the class period and no concern to the teacher's valuable lecture. He is not familiar with the uncertainty he is bringing towards life but their parents know the difficulty he is holding. So, they always try to reshape the future and confine their activities.
The exquisite point is that with the technological advancement young children are less concentrate on the study which is the vital task at that period. But, they are wasted their valuable time by watching movies, TV, chatting on social site etc. Moreover, by watching the movie or TV they are trying to imitate the celebrity which is the worst part. Sometimes this imitation conveyed a negative impact on their mental and physical growth. For particular, when I was a little kid I was obedient to my parents. But, in my adolescent period when I started watching a movie or TV I was so influenced by a celebrity that I trying to copy their clothes and forced my parents to buy the clothes. I was so involved with the fashion that I failed in my ten grade and then my parents strongly restrict my activity. As a result, I misunderstood them but after completing my high school I realized that what they did for me.
To recapitulate, for better future rules and protocols are necessary until they are mature. Rules control the situation from being worse.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'societies'' or 'society's'?
Suggestion: societies'; society's
...e are a plethora of people content that societies norm are very strict for young people a...
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Line 9, column 617, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...I was so influenced by a celebrity that I trying to copy their clothes and forced...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00502512563 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70183112294 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550251256281 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.407132274 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5833333333 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103308634141 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295474289085 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405881460994 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0673572446145 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362921791905 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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