Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whereas, in the hectic life, there are a massive pressure on young people to make their favorable life, the rules that societies and also families are expected juvenile to pursue sometimes are too much. there has always been controversial debate on whether families must be too strict on the rules that their young child should be obeying or not. I personally contend that being too strict will provide more bad effects, so that I disagree with this manner. In the following paragraphs, two conspicuous reasons will cogently substantiate this perspective.
One of the rules coming to mind at first is that some parents want their children to study most of the time without having any entertainment. they pushed them to study more and more to be entering a high-ranked university. they send them to extra classes. but I think they should let young people to make some discipline for themself. In this way, their self-confidence may be risen. they can make decision on their own.For examle, besides the study, juvenile needs doing sports. it also makes them eager to study, improve their health and also fresh their mind.
Another noteworthy point in supporting my stance is that some parents limit their children's relationship. For example, a child want to spend more time with someone who is in the range of his/her age. but their family do not allow him/her. because it might need more care about their relationship. they have to become familiar with the parents of his/her friends family and it will be take their time. but I think parents should not limit their children's relation because of their business.
To make a long story short, I disagree with the opinion of harsh rules that are expected young people to obey because of two reasons of taking the ability of defining disciplines and limiting their relationship. If the rules are appointed in the best way, I believe that it can be good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, whereas, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93498452012 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57911275435 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520123839009 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7316853485 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8947368421 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162577596505 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505277077876 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566255084818 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124218925029 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901843393037 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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