The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake The level of salt in the lake s water what scientists call its salinity has been increasing steadily for years because the lake s water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfal

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The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake’s water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake’s water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced by rainfall or rivers. If the trend continues, the lake’s water will soon become so salty that the lake will be unable to support fish and bird populations. The lake would then become essentially a dead zone. Fortunately, there are several ways to reverse the trend that is threatening the lake’s health.
One option is direct removal of salt from the lake’s water in special desalination facilities. Water from the lake would be pumped into the facilities and heated. This would cause the water to evaporate into steam, while salt and other materials dissolved in the water would be left behind. The steam would then be cooled down and returned to the lake as salt-free water. Gradually, the high salt levels would be reduced and the lake’s overall health would be restored.
Another possible solution is to dilute the salt level in the lake with water from the ocean. Since water in the Pacific Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake, bringing ocean water into the lake would decrease the lake’s salinity. The ocean water could be delivered through pipelines or canals.
Yet another solution would be to control the lake’s salinity by constructing walls to divide the lake into several sections. In the smaller sections, salinity would be allowed to increase. However, in the main and largest section, salinity would be reduced and controlled by, among other things, directing all the freshwater from small rivers in the area to flow into that main section of the lake.

The listening content totally refutes the reading passage in the several ways to reverse the trend that is dangerous to the lake's health. To begin with, the reading says that there is an option that we can directly remove the salt from the lake's water in special desalination facilities. However, the speaker argues that even it is true that it would reduce the salt level of lake, but it would make the serious problem. When salt and other materials dissolved in the water during the water to evaporate into steam, it would generate some toxic chemical material which would increase health risk. For example, if this type of chemical material release into the air, it would exacerbate the air. People who live near the facility would be dangerous if they breath.

Moreover, the reading suggests that diluting the salt level in the lake with the water from the ocean can reduce the lake's salinity. The listening points out the fact that the government would not have enough resource to make this happen. If we want to dilute the salt level of the lake by the water of the ocean, we need to build the pile which is about 100 kilometer long. This construction is too expensive that the government cannot accomplish.

Finally, the reading thinks that we can construct walls to divide the lake into several sections. Nevertheless, the speaker asserts that the location of those walls is too dangerous so that this solution is impossible. This lake is near the California which is the various geological place. There are lots of earthquakes happened everyday. If we construct walls there, the walls will collide each other and destroyed by the earthquakes. The salt lever would not be able to divide successfully.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...erse the trend that is dangerous to the lakes health. To begin with, the reading says...
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Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. However, the speaker argues that even it is true that it would reduce the salt...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 761, Rule ID: BREATHE_BREATH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'breathe'? 'breath' is a noun.
Suggestion: breathe
...the facility would be dangerous if they breath. Moreover, the reading suggests that...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...the water from the ocean can reduce the lakes salinity. The listening points out the ...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...ed to build the pile which is about 100 kilometer long. This construction is too expensiv...
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Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... There are lots of earthquakes happened everyday. If we construct walls there, the walls...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ruct walls there, the walls will collide each other and destroyed by the eart...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he walls will collide each other and destroyed by the earthquakes. The salt l...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, for example, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89347079038 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47861866799 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505154639175 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3287573196 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06452816374 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22586001259 0.272083759551 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073872616103 0.0996497079465 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712039703457 0.0662205650399 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158734779949 0.162205337803 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456937372593 0.0443174109184 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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